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He’d whisper sweet nothings to trees
Hoping the roots would remember his name
I watched him drop pieces of himself like bread crumbs
His lantern limbs quivering

I don’t think he ever really knew how lovely he was
And on a sunny day when the pavement was sweating
Out onto the roadside
Everyone else found out too

I don’t think I’ll ever forget him because he was like a dream catcher
So quiet and magical in the way his eyes turned green in the dark
And blue in the winter
Like he stored the world’s secrets behind his cuckoo spit heart
The loveliest people in the world are often the saddest and that's really sad.
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AbbyMeyer Featured By Owner Dec 6, 2013
Beautiful and poignant. :') I particularly love the line 'I watched him drop pieces of himself like bread crumbs'. I can imagine that, if not literally.
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Chipchinka Featured By Owner Jul 16, 2013   Writer
There is so much at work in this and I don't know where to begin except to say that I was hooked with the title, and drawn in through the entire poem itself.  Is there one part I like better than the other?  Yes.  No.  Um.  Yes.  I mean, I like all of it, at different times and for different reasons.  I've drank vodka "do dna" or "to the bottom" with Russian friends, and it was the taste of love...and songs, and something that turned into a really serious group hug.  The poem title revived that memory for me; I want to meet the one who whispers sweet nothings to trees, hoping that the roots would remember his name.  WOW!  WOW!  WOW!  Michaeld Ondaatje once said quite a lot about poetic truth, and this poem illustrates that, perfectly.  This is just swimming with gorgeous images.  

Brilliant.  Thank you for posting this.
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grew-up-a-screw-up Featured By Owner Aug 6, 2013  Student General Artist
Thank you so much for taking the time to read my poem and write such a beautiful comment. My only regret is that I took so long to reply. Mainly due to personal interference's in my daily life. Anyway time for my response.

I love the story you told me, the whole poem is balanced on the idea of nostalgia so I'm thrilled to see how it invoked that response from you.  I'm so glad you liked the imagery, I often feel as though it is too obscure and flits between grey areas too often for people to relate to it. If I may, I'd like to perhaps incorporate your memory into a poem at a later time, it's a beautiful image of tenderness and nostalgia and I'd be honored if you'd let me. 
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Chipchinka Featured By Owner Aug 6, 2013   Writer
Oh, I completely understand how personal interference from that every-day life stuff gets in the way, especially if it's demanding!

I'm glad that my comment had a positive effect.  Feel free to incorporate the memory I related.  It's a fairly common "vodka experience" and so a lot of people will probably relate to it.  

What I like about this poem is the fact that the imagery is specific, but anybody with a brain will get it.  I think you were successful in what you were putting out there, and you put a few humdingers in there, starting with the title and ending with the last line.
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grew-up-a-screw-up Featured By Owner Aug 9, 2013  Student General Artist
It's horrible right?

It did, in fact it sparked off a lot of nostalgia for me personally which in turn inspired me to write a lot of other poems which I might post later. Well, I have a lot of experience with vodka, often I end up writing a lot of poetry when slightly intoxicated.

Thank you so much, I'm glad that my poem was successful in intriguing people like yourself.
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Chipchinka Featured By Owner Aug 12, 2013   Writer
That personal interference thing does suck.

I think that's what happened to me...lots of personal nostalgia, some of which was accompanied by cringes or at least bemused laughter.  I have experience with vodka in Polish, Russian, Czech and Ukrainian...the Russian and Czech memories are pleasant...complicated but pleasant...the Polish memories are...well...ambiguous...we'll just leave it at that: one of the people responsible for that memory leaves me shaking my head in wonder.  :)
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grew-up-a-screw-up Featured By Owner Sep 8, 2013  Student General Artist
I know what you mean, reminiscing about old times and friends. Sometimes it's sad since some of those people aren't in your life anymore but that's just how things work. I have dabbled in mostly Russian and Polish vodka, not so much Czech or Ukrainian. I know what you mean, it's strange how certain foods, music or drinks bring back the nostalgia and then when you reflect on those times they seem to slide past your retinas and you're so immersed in it all that its breath taking. c:
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Chipchinka Featured By Owner Sep 10, 2013   Writer
I love the way memories are fluid and seem to have their own distinct lives that are separate from your own.  Especially memories involving people who have shaped you.  My strongest memories are actually of those who've shaped me or who have led to the inspirations I commonly feel now.  Funny how a lot of them are Russian and Czech for me.
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Shoeborn Featured By Owner Jun 14, 2013  Student General Artist
I think it's because they know enough about the world to weep for it, and enough to know they have to try and make it better.
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grew-up-a-screw-up Featured By Owner Jun 15, 2013  Student General Artist
I couldn't agree more, the tragedy is that those types of people are so sensitive that the world breaks them...
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Shoeborn Featured By Owner Jun 15, 2013  Student General Artist
And oftentimes it's impossible to help them, because they're breaking us with them.
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grew-up-a-screw-up Featured By Owner Jun 16, 2013  Student General Artist
Exactly, there's no way to really do anything about it.
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jade-pandora Featured By Owner Apr 22, 2013
:worship: Hello! This wonderful piece of yours has been featured here: [link]
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grew-up-a-screw-up Featured By Owner Apr 23, 2013  Student General Artist
Hi! Wow thank you so much!
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jade-pandora Featured By Owner Apr 24, 2013
You're so very welcome! :D
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Prof-Stein Featured By Owner Apr 15, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
But hey, if you're sad, then doesn't that make you lovely? ;3
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grew-up-a-screw-up Featured By Owner Apr 18, 2013  Student General Artist
Sad I agree but I don't think I'm close to lovely, but the flattery was nice c:
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Prof-Stein Featured By Owner Apr 23, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
What if it is a possibility that it was not intended to be flattery? :p
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grew-up-a-screw-up Featured By Owner Apr 23, 2013  Student General Artist
Then you are quite the unintentional charmer? c:
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Prof-Stein Featured By Owner May 5, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
It would seem so.
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grew-up-a-screw-up Featured By Owner May 7, 2013  Student General Artist
such a modesty.
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Prof-Stein Featured By Owner May 10, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
XD
I apologize. Egotistical humor has always been one of my strong points.
Though I could probably kill with self-deprecating humor if I tried.
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grew-up-a-screw-up Featured By Owner May 10, 2013  Student General Artist
No need to apologize I find your humor to be funny, dry sarcastic humor has its charm.
That's not necessarily a bad thing XD
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UndertheShaydeWood Featured By Owner Apr 14, 2013
What a creative and beautiful portrait especially the metaphor of the dream catcher. But how unusual the title. I am still woring out how it connects - don't tell me. I enjoy the puzzle!
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grew-up-a-screw-up Featured By Owner Apr 18, 2013  Student General Artist
Haha thank you so much, and I'll keep the secrets to myself though I'd love to hear your theories, I'm pretty intrigued to know what your perception was.
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rociobelindamendez Featured By Owner Apr 13, 2013
love it. The first stanza is especially beautiful , thank you for sharing x
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grew-up-a-screw-up Featured By Owner Apr 14, 2013  Student General Artist
thank you for taking the time to read my work
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rociobelindamendez Featured By Owner Apr 14, 2013
ur welcome :D
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mikiluvzanime Featured By Owner Apr 10, 2013  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
I agree with your comment... You're such a beautiful writer dear and I love your poetry! I can't help but favorite everything I see that's yours because its all so good!
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grew-up-a-screw-up Featured By Owner Apr 11, 2013  Student General Artist
Wow thank you so much for the lovely comment and favourite(s) on my work it means a lot so thank you.
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mikiluvzanime Featured By Owner Apr 11, 2013  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
Ya of course :) I love your work! xx
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UselessItalian Featured By Owner Apr 10, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
It is. D:
Very true.

AMAZING poem.
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grew-up-a-screw-up Featured By Owner Apr 11, 2013  Student General Artist
Thank you so much c:
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UselessItalian Featured By Owner Apr 11, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
Of course. ^^
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CrumbledWings Featured By Owner Apr 10, 2013
I like the title and the descriptions you give are lovely
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grew-up-a-screw-up Featured By Owner Apr 11, 2013  Student General Artist
Thank you so much
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PhoenixOfWinterfell Featured By Owner Apr 10, 2013  Student Writer
Beautiful... And the title is pretty original :)
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grew-up-a-screw-up Featured By Owner Apr 10, 2013  Student General Artist
Thank you so much c:
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EDMrox Featured By Owner Apr 10, 2013
..and the most beautiful are also the most damned...
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grew-up-a-screw-up Featured By Owner Apr 10, 2013  Student General Artist
beauty is in the eye of the beholder and I suppose we're all damned, just in different ways.
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EDMrox Featured By Owner Apr 10, 2013
It is supposed to be in the eye of the beholder.In perfect world.I stopped beleiving that a while ago.I n history ,it seems its given as a punishment orpaying penance for having something others dont.Just a thought...
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grew-up-a-screw-up Featured By Owner Apr 11, 2013  Student General Artist
In a perfect world, that is true but I still think there are some who think like that, or would like to hope anyway. It's a very interesting thought, I'd be lying if I said I wasn't intrigued. Human kind is such a strange think don't you think? we constantly want what we don't have.
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therealanonymous Featured By Owner Apr 10, 2013
So much love for this.
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grew-up-a-screw-up Featured By Owner Apr 10, 2013  Student General Artist
Thank you :glomp:
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SpreadsAndShuffles Featured By Owner Apr 10, 2013  Student Writer
There are no words on how much I love this.
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grew-up-a-screw-up Featured By Owner Apr 10, 2013  Student General Artist
Thank you so much for taking the time to read it :iconsuperglompplz:
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SpreadsAndShuffles Featured By Owner Apr 10, 2013  Student Writer
You're very welcome! I'm a literature fan at heart, hence my DA account being used for my short stories. :tighthug:
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grew-up-a-screw-up Featured By Owner Apr 11, 2013  Student General Artist
I'd love to read some of your works thank you so much for taking the time to read mine, is there one of your works that you'd suggest I read? :glomp:
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SpreadsAndShuffles Featured By Owner Apr 13, 2013  Student Writer
Well, I only have about five stories submitted on DA, while I have about six more still in the self-editing process. :forgiveme:

But you could read all of them, if you wish! Each one only takes, tops, 5minutes to read. :D
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