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sometimes I hate the idea
of talking

I rather eat the autumn
skies crushing cold air between my molars
and hiding shaky hands
between pages of dictionaries
and clickclickclicking sounds of typewriters



you asked me why I wrote poems
on the soles of my shoes
and I told you

it was because I wanted to
imprint myself on the earth
then I can create beauty
even if I am not
Sometimes, I wish I could just choke on those sharp blue cloudless skies
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HermioneFrost Featured By Owner Aug 30, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
Wow! This has such a beautiful depth to it. Outstanding job!
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grew-up-a-screw-up Featured By Owner Sep 14, 2013  Student General Artist
Thank you so much!
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HermioneFrost Featured By Owner Sep 15, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
You're welcome.
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dreamersthoughts Featured By Owner Apr 6, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
I'm honestly speechless, the impact this makes absolutely astounding. Thank-you for writing out exactly how I feel. No matter what anyone or the mirror tells you don't listen to them stranger, you're words hold beauty, and your voice is strong.
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grew-up-a-screw-up Featured By Owner Apr 6, 2013  Student General Artist
Thank you for the lovely comment, and I'm happy that you found the poem relatable if not a little sad but if I can offer some semblance of solace in my poetry then thank yo.
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DragonKeeper92 Featured By Owner Feb 27, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
bhfdjvbh,jadnfdjnvkdfnvkfhvidfvdfkjhvildfnv!!!!!!!!!!! wow, i dont even know what i just said, but i fell in love with this poem the moment i say it!!!!!!!!!!
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grew-up-a-screw-up Featured By Owner Feb 28, 2013  Student General Artist
Hahaha thanks so much
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SweetsAndCharades Featured By Owner Jan 22, 2013
This is wonderfully written :)
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morning-tonight Featured By Owner Jan 22, 2013
It's amazing, I could feel the crisp crunch pf a cool autumn breeze and picture the earth as a world covered in words. And as a note, to love is to be love, to make art is to be an artist, and to create beauty, one is beautiful.
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Shnubs Featured By Owner Nov 14, 2012  Student General Artist
I'm speechless
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grew-up-a-screw-up Featured By Owner Nov 16, 2012  Student General Artist
Thanks so much, I'm going to assume that's a good kind of speechless? .w.
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Shnubs Featured By Owner Nov 16, 2012  Student General Artist
It is! c:
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grew-up-a-screw-up Featured By Owner Nov 17, 2012  Student General Artist
Thank you so much! ;u;
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dawn181 Featured By Owner Nov 14, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
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SPEECHLESS
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grew-up-a-screw-up Featured By Owner Nov 16, 2012  Student General Artist
Haha thanks so much, I'm guessing you liked it? .w.
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dawn181 Featured By Owner Nov 16, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
Loved it!
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grew-up-a-screw-up Featured By Owner Nov 17, 2012  Student General Artist
Thanks so much! ;w;
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jessie0wessie Featured By Owner Nov 9, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
Beautiful
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UndertheShaydeWood Featured By Owner Nov 8, 2012
I still wish I possessed your clarity of metaphor and perfect phrasing - beautiful, even if YOU are too!
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grew-up-a-screw-up Featured By Owner Nov 11, 2012  Student General Artist
elThanks so much .w.
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Whitelephants Featured By Owner Nov 5, 2012
love the ending!
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grew-up-a-screw-up Featured By Owner Nov 9, 2012  Student General Artist
Thanks so much!
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tiganusi Featured By Owner Nov 4, 2012  Professional
I see a lot of potential here, but the structure's a bit wonky. I'm going to take a run at your line breaks and grammar and cut a little bit of it, to show you another possibility.

sometimes I hate the idea
of talking

I rather eat the autumn
skies crushing cold air between my molars
and hiding shaky hands
between pages of dictionaries
and clickclickclicking sounds of typewriters



you asked me why I wrote poems
on the soles of my shoes
and I told you

it was because I wanted to
imprint myself on the earth
then I can create beauty
even if I am not
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grew-up-a-screw-up Featured By Owner Nov 9, 2012  Student General Artist
Thanks so much for the advice, I really love that format, I was trying to do something new, but I'm pretty much an ameteur when it comes to writing, so this was such a big help! Thanks so much.
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Rifle1980 Featured By Owner Nov 3, 2012   General Artist
beautiful mind you have Sophie :)
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grew-up-a-screw-up Featured By Owner Nov 9, 2012  Student General Artist
thank you ^w^
it's not always beautiful, but when it is, I try to capture it as perfectly as possible.
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ThePhantasmKnight Featured By Owner Nov 2, 2012
The beauty of this world is made in the strokes of those who appear to not live up to the standards set for them by mortal men.
We are not meant to be perfect in the sense of idealistic and all-knowing life. We are meant to be flawed, for there is no perfection greater than that of the perfection of potential.
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grew-up-a-screw-up Featured By Owner Nov 11, 2012  Student General Artist
Then why is it in this world, that it seems only the beautiful people seem to matter? Where looks over rule character and content? We are judged on our appearance before anything else, status, jobs, clothes. Flaws are weakness, they are used to tear us apart, layer by layer until we are nothing but a writhing, pitifull mass of self hate.
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ThePhantasmKnight Featured By Owner Nov 11, 2012
That is what the mass populous *believes*, not what is true.

That's the funny thing about truth, it doesn't need to be out in the open and ever controlling. It is silent and patient. And all of it waits till the world realizes it.
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grew-up-a-screw-up Featured By Owner Nov 11, 2012  Student General Artist
I suppose, though its a slow process, and even then you can't suddenly change the thoughts of masses, people don't like change. They fear it, just like the truth.
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Prof-Stein Featured By Owner Nov 2, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
If you were to strangle yourself with those clouds, the world would be less beautiful without you.
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grew-up-a-screw-up Featured By Owner Nov 9, 2012  Student General Artist
I really doubt that, but thank you anyway.
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Copperfrost Featured By Owner Nov 2, 2012  Student General Artist
Very much agreed.
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Prof-Stein Featured By Owner Nov 2, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
Great minds think alike. ;D
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