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I seem to have forgotten the sound of my own heartbeat
Splitting apart my limbs I've found the source of my insanity
Coiled around veins and arteries
Star dust and a lazy man’s drug
Has put me to sleep under fictitious pretenses
Of forbidden apples and two faced prince charming’s
syndrome is a really pleasant word, syn-dro-me it's so lovely in the way it rolls off the tongue
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rociobelindamendez Featured By Owner Apr 13, 2013
I love the way u write, it is effortlessly poetic. Really great :) very talented xx
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grew-up-a-screw-up Featured By Owner Apr 14, 2013  Student General Artist
Thank you so much c:
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rociobelindamendez Featured By Owner Apr 14, 2013
:) pleasure x
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CrumbledWings Featured By Owner Apr 10, 2013
Holy crap, i absolutely love the bemusing and intense emotive feel wrapped around a theme that i can barely understand but completely love, coupled with a strange and spectacular rhythm.
So ,ummmm, yeah i like it. :D
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grew-up-a-screw-up Featured By Owner Apr 11, 2013  Student General Artist
Thank you so much, I'm happy you took the time to read it, enjoy it and write me a lovely comment so thank you c:
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ssensory Featured By Owner Mar 24, 2013   Writer
I favorited this awhile back, and was surprised I never commented, so I will now.

Even though this is six lines, it's perfect being this short. It's so impactful - I love the word choice. It's seriously such a beautiful poem, the imagery is fantastic. Ah. :heart:

I am such a sucker for mental disorder-like poems. Very intriguing.
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grew-up-a-screw-up Featured By Owner Mar 25, 2013  Student General Artist
Thank you so much I'm glad I could woo you with my angst-y poetry, but in all seriousness thank you so much for the lovely comment
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ssensory Featured By Owner Mar 25, 2013   Writer
You're very welcome! :heart:
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Harzlek Featured By Owner Mar 6, 2013
Syndrome has two syllables... I am sure you know.
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grew-up-a-screw-up Featured By Owner Mar 7, 2013  Student General Artist
I do, I just like playing around with words and testing them on my tongue.
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Harzlek Featured By Owner Mar 7, 2013
I know what you mean
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TheSkadebjerg Featured By Owner Mar 6, 2013   Digital Artist
This is great!
REally love it especially the last passage (?). Great work!
AND the title is my username xDD
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grew-up-a-screw-up Featured By Owner Mar 7, 2013  Student General Artist
Thank you so much and that's so cool! c:
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MinnieOtakuDreamer Featured By Owner Mar 6, 2013  Student General Artist
I really love this :3 I can read this as lyrics, it'd make a lovely, haunting song. :D
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grew-up-a-screw-up Featured By Owner Mar 7, 2013  Student General Artist
Thank you I've never considered looking at poetry like that so thanks so much! c:
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Summonaconjurer Featured By Owner Mar 6, 2013
really well done on this piece though =)... lots of layers, lots of room for interpretation. I got the feeling she hated the way she was, yet had the insight to hate the men who took apparent advantage of her 'condition'... just one of many ways to take it
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grew-up-a-screw-up Featured By Owner Mar 6, 2013  Student General Artist
Thank you, I'm glad you liked it and picked up on the "symptoms" (for lack of a better word) I tried to make it as ambiguous as possible so thank you for the lovely comment.
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Summonaconjurer Featured By Owner Mar 6, 2013
hey is all good! keep writing awesome stuff and there will be plenty more lovely comments where that came from =P
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grew-up-a-screw-up Featured By Owner Mar 7, 2013  Student General Artist
I'll try my best so thank you for the support c:
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Witchcrata Featured By Owner Mar 6, 2013
This is really beautiful. :heart: :blowkiss:
Stupid question: is Snow White Syndrome an actual thing? If so, what is it?:dummy:
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grew-up-a-screw-up Featured By Owner Mar 6, 2013  Student General Artist
Haha it's not stupid at all, I only came across it a few days ago.
So here it is c:

Codependency and Depression in Introverted Females (DEFINITION IN A NUT SHELL)

Snow White is a woman who secretly doesn't like her self very much. Her conscience plagues her every step, and suppresses her every desire. Her conscience forces her to suppress what she wants in favor of what others want, until it has removed all motivation from her life. Her unconscious mind then reacts to her consciences tyranny by serving up a dose of depression, so that she may understand just what she is doing to her self by being so tyrannized by her conscience, and suppressing her desires and her Will.
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Witchcrata Featured By Owner Mar 6, 2013
Wow. That must really suck...
But thanks for the explanation! :D
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grew-up-a-screw-up Featured By Owner Mar 7, 2013  Student General Artist
Pretty much, and your welcome c:
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Estuari Featured By Owner Mar 5, 2013
I was searching for the meaning of Snow White Syndrome when I read your poem. I admire how you weave images and language. :+favlove: Love puts us under a spell that only we can wake ourselves from in order to discover the true, ugly face of love. :clap:
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grew-up-a-screw-up Featured By Owner Mar 6, 2013  Student General Artist
Thank you so much that means a lot c:
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Estuari Featured By Owner Mar 6, 2013
You're welcome.
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indianachick67 Featured By Owner Mar 5, 2013
Beautiful & quite mysterious!
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kat-eyed Featured By Owner Mar 5, 2013
I really enjoy this, and would love to know your inspiration for it.
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grew-up-a-screw-up Featured By Owner Mar 6, 2013  Student General Artist
Thank you, well I guess the inspiration was drawing on the story of snow white and twisting it so it fits into something more relatable and abstract
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