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We'd make drunken eye contact
While sat on iron bar motorway bridges
Road kill paved beneath us
And diluted starts that hung above us like spirits

Passing bottles of liquor while discussing Shakespeare
I'd hide behind my sleeves
We were scatter brained and tongue tied
Scorched pupils and leaper fingertips

I don't know how to let go of these Polaroid memories
We need to plan our escape because Alice had the right idea
The smell of stagnant rainwater is making me nauseous
Because sometimes painkillers never seem to work
And carving words into one another is the only way we can exist.
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I don't know how I feel about this poem...
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!randomlyinspired-21 Nov 16, 2012  Student Writer
I don't know how to let go of these Polaroid memories
We need to plan our escape because Alice had the right idea
The smell of stagnant rainwater is making me nauseous
Because sometimes painkillers never seem to work
And carving words into one another is the only way we can exist.
I just love the ending :heart:

I really like your style of writing-so much imagery and words that really capture the senses, like filling out a blank canvas. :)

Good job! :D
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~grew-up-a-screw-up Nov 16, 2012  Student General Artist
Thank you so much, that truly means alot, I'm so glad you like my writing .w.
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!randomlyinspired-21 Nov 16, 2012  Student Writer
keep it up! :)
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:iconstarkpretty:
I love how your work creates a canvas in my head. The canvas is really dark this time, but with sheer moments of beauty.

<3

Feel good about this poem.
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~grew-up-a-screw-up Oct 8, 2012  Student General Artist
Thank you so much for the lovely comment, I love how you described that.

Thank you so much.
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:iconstarkpretty:
No problem, I mean it! You're very welcome :D
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:iconakimitsuhayashi:
I love how you always manage to make your poetry like a painting. The words you write are painting a picture in my head.
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~grew-up-a-screw-up Oct 6, 2012  Student General Artist
Thanks so much I'm glad you liked it.
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Dem imageryz.
That's not even a word.
This is THAT great. I'm adding crap to the dictionary.
:P
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~grew-up-a-screw-up Oct 6, 2012  Student General Artist
Haha, thanks .w.
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